The object
I was in the middle of a movie when suddenly I heard a loud THUMP. I jumped, then I rushed downstairs. I was home alone, so I was very gingerly about every little thing that was going on. I went towards my backyard's sliding door to find my dog, Max, crushed up against the glass. Everything seemed fine, but something made me glance back. Something bright, yellow and shiny. I opened the door and my dog rushed in my house, however, I was more focused on the object. It seemed awesome. I then discovered… It was a wrapper? That wasn’t so remarkable after all.
When you wrote, So I very gingerly about every little thing that was going on.It doesn't make a lot of sense,what did you gingerly do? You probably left out some words out of the sentence. For example: So I very gingerly studied every little thing that was going on. Or something along the lines of that.
ReplyDeleteBut you have a really great story all in all!
Yeah, I agree but the problem is I have a limited amount of words
Deleteon 'I went towards my backyards sliding door' there should be a apostrophe between d and s on backyard's
ReplyDeleteOh, Thank you !
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